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发布网友发布时间：2022-04-28 22:58

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热心网友时间：2022-06-24 19:15

1、he never slackened his studies中“studies”应该为“study”，因为“study”是不可数名词；
2、He made very detailed plan应加上定冠词“a”，因为“plan”是可数名词；
3、do morning readings and practice to give lecture from seven to eight中“readings”应该为“reading”，固定搭配“practice doing sth”,所以应该是“practice giving lecture”；
4、observe the people who does better than him中，people是集合名词，谓语动词应该用复数形式，所以“does”改为“do”；
5、observe the people who does better than him and try to find out why they can do better and adopt their methods into his advantage这一句重复使用“and”连接不同的对象，很罗嗦，还有歧义，把句子截开，改为 observe the people who does better than him，try to find out why they can do better and adopt their methods into his advantage；
还有一些错误，是连词、时态和标点使用不当，我帮你重新修改的如下
Although he was busy rushing about among his part-time jobs under the great living pressure, he never slackened his study. He made a very detailed plan: gets up before half past six in the morning, does morning readings and practices giving lecture from seven to eight; observes the people who do better than him , tries to find out why they can do better and adopt their methods into his advantage; sets aside five hours every week to read newspapers and magazines in library to broaden his horizon and activate his mind; takes part in various activities in the hope of learning and improving his practical ability. In his eyes, neither study nor piety he could give up. The only way to make his parents feel happy is to study hard and master the skills efficiently.
In 2004, he took the position of Chief Leader of the Market Expansion Department of Work-study Management Centre in his university. The following two years, he drafted out 90 planning books, visited hundreds of corporations in Hunan, and established good relationships with about 300 corporations such as Suning Electric, Beida Jade Bird, Backgammon and McDonald’s12, and he also helped 1000 poor students find work-study jobs.

热心网友时间：2022-06-24 19:16

Although he was coping with his part-time jobs under heavy living pressure, he had never slackened his studies. He had made a very detailed plan: get up before half past six in the morning, do morning readings and practice to give lecture from seven to eight; observe the people who do better than him and look for resons why they can do better and then adopt their methods to his advantage; set aside five hours every week to read newspapers and magazines in library to broaden his horizon and activate his mind; participate in various activities so as to learn and improve his practical ability. He strong believes that he must not give up his studies and piety. The only way to make his parents feel happy is to study hard and master the skills efficiently.

In 2004, he achieved the position of Chief Leader of the Market Expansion Department of Work-study Management Centre in his university. In the following two years, he drafted 90 planning books, visited hundreds of corporations in Hunan, and established good relationships with about 300 corporations such as Suning Electric, Beida Jade Bird, Backgammon, McDonald’s12. Moreover, he helped 1000 poor students to find work-study jobs.

热心网友时间：2022-06-24 19:16

While he was busy trouble on his part-time work, under the pressure of life, he has never relaxed his research. He made a very detailed plan: 6 am and 30 get up and read the morning practice, lectures by seven to eight years; observation, it is better than him and try to find out why they can do better and to take their Way into his advantage.Set aside five hours a week in the library to read newspapers and magazines, to expand his horizons, to activate the inspiration for his mind; taken part in various activities, hopes to learn and improve his ability to practice. In his eyes, neither study nor could he give up the study. The only way out, so that his parents are happy, study hard and master skills.In 2004, the position taken by the executive leader of the work of the Department of market expansion, in his university research management centre. Two years later, he drafted a plan of 90 books, visited hundreds of companies in Hunan, and established a good relationship, with about 300 companies, such as Suning Electric, Beida Jade Bird, backgammon, he also 1000 to help poor students find work research.
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热心网友时间：2022-06-24 19:17

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1.study 是学习。别人用的studies 是指学业
2.不看后面阿，是plans 不是 a plan
5.observe those people who do better than him and try to find out the reasons behind it thus adopting their methods into his advantage；

plan 里面的动词不该是第三人称
activate his mind...他是机器啊..
practical skills