初中英语作文,总考不好,麻烦大家看一下提提建议!谢谢!

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热心网友 时间：2023-09-24 17:57

One sunny afternoon ,we had a PE lesson.We gathered on the playground.The teacher told us that we would(改成will) learn the long jump .I began to feel nervous beacasue l was afraid of falling （加over）.First（改成firstly） teacher showed us how to jump better and longer. Then we were asked to be ready. After a moment,it turned to me .l looked at the way and tried my first time .Unfortunately, l failed and fell down .My friend and the teacher encouraged me . l felt powerful again,and tried again.At last ,l jumped over 3 meters!l was so happy that l couldn't say a word.Yes,l succeeded!As the saying goes,'Practise makes the perfect!'
括号里的改一下，就可以了。初中能写成这样我只能说 well done.追问可就这篇文章也要扣个3.4分的！！！

追答要求有点高

热心网友 时间：2023-09-24 17:58

。。。。楼上的那个完全是改错了= = 人家时态好好的。。。
第二行， beacasue， 应该是because
第三行， 对的，first改firstly+“，”会比较好；然后应该jump better and farther，不是longer。
we were asked to be ready= =。。。这里有一个准备的过程，be ready 十分生硬。改get ready。
！！后面，it was my turn。轮到我了。。。。没有it turned to me这种说法。
。。。后面一句。。。。I looked at the pathway(更具象一点，通路而不要泛指“路”) and had my first try.
Practice makes perfect.没有the

然后初中作文的话这样改就可以了，要求没必要更高了。