请各位帮忙修改一下个人陈述

发布网友发布时间：2022-10-08 03:42

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热心网友时间：2023-11-02 20:11

I read your PS. I feel that you could make change in the following way:
(1) Talk about your college experience in the U.S. first. It is more relevant than "Dai's story". Talk more about what you have learnt in univesity, and why you want to transfer to Berkeley.

(2)Talk more about your personal ambition, and your passion with computer major.

(3) Shorten "Dai's story". Dai's story is more about proverty than your interest in computer science. It is not so relevant.

Good luck!

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