高分英语改错

发布网友发布时间：2023-01-16 09:58

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热心网友时间：2023-11-15 16:13

classroom building 应是teaching buiding
on the classroom buiding's left应改为 on the left of the teaching building
on the classroombuiding's right改为 on the right of the teaching building
alab on the gym's left改为 a lab on the left of the gym
my teachers改为our teachers
georraphy改为 geography
另外,你应该是初一或初二吧? 你的作文都是There be 句型,缺少长短句的配合,空间的排序也不太好,下次写作文要注意哦!其实你可以多背一些万能句子,适当变换一下.另外要注意连词的应用,比如in addition, by the way, too.... to, so.. that 或者in a word 之类的总结用语.

热心网友时间：2023-11-15 16:13

My new school
This is my school.There is a classroom building in the center of the school.There is a gym on the classroom buiding's left.There is a playground on the classroombuiding's right.There is alab on the gym's
left.There is a swimming pool next to the playground.The teachers are very friendly to us.We like my teachers.We study biology,georraphy,English,Chinese,math,art,P.E.,science and so on.
I like my new school very much.

给你在打一便,
my new school.
this is my new school, there is a school building in the centre of the school, where we study. on the left side of the study building, there is the gym, and on the study buildings right there is the playground. on the gyms left is the lab, and next to our playground is the swimming pool.

our teacher is very kind to us, we all like them very much,

we stuy the folowing subjects:Biology,Geography,English,Chinese,Mathematics,Art,P.E,Science, and much much more.

i really love my school, its the best to me

加了点形容词,生动了一下,你几年级?7-8一下这样写保你A+!

热心网友时间：2023-11-15 16:13

热心网友时间：2023-11-15 16:14

怎么说呢，文章整体语法没啥大错误，但关键是句式死板，从开篇到结尾几乎都是there be句型...建议在作文时使用一些不同的表达方法。
有时不用使用there be 句型，直接表达就可以了。把简单句和复杂句想结合使用。

还有就是教学楼用：teaching building 好些。

热心网友时间：2023-11-15 16:15

"We like my teachers"中,把"we"改成"I",或者把"my"改成"our"(此句中主语和形容词性物主代词要一致)
有些单词好象打错了:"classroombuiding's"改为"classroom building's" "alab"应该是"a lab" "georraphy"应该是"geography"

热心网友时间：2023-11-15 16:14

热心网友时间：2023-11-15 16:15