推荐信润色 一封院长推荐信,请英语高手帮忙~
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发布时间：2022-05-20 16:41
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热心网友
时间：2023-11-01 18:08
修改一稿，供参。
Dear Sir/Madam （或者To Whom It May Concern，当然如果知道具体的称呼最好）,
In the capacity of the Vice Dean of the Foreign Language Institute of Northeast Dianli University (NEDU), I am writing with pleasure to recommend Miss Hang Su, an excellent student of our institute, to your esteemed university.
Miss Hang Su, as one of the most diligent student in my Reading Class, has impressed me with her self-motivated attitude. [Although she got a bit lower grade, if you had took the difficulty of the test papers and my strict grading into account, you would understand why she is still among the top 5% of my course. ](推荐信没有必要说自己分数不高吧，就说即使试卷很难，评分很严格，你还是在前5%好了。 建议整句改为Despite how difficult the test papers were and how strict I was when scoring the tests, she is still among the top 5% of my class. ) Besides her outstanding academic performance, she is also a brilliant play director. When her play named “Our Stories” was officially released in our university auditorium, I felt honored to be invited (这里原来用了invented= =注意细节) as a special guest. The beautiful screen and exciting plot twists and turns deeply attracted me, and the play was a total success. I was amazed that my student had such great aptitude. I really appreciate her conscientious and dependable attitude towards study and work. To conclude, Miss Hang Su is a student with great personality and ideals, one of the best that I have met in my whole life.
With Miss Su’s character, team spirit, enthusiasm and capacity, I am firmly convinced that Miss Su will succeed as a graate. Your favorable consideration of her admission will be highly appreciated.
If you need more information about her, please feel free to contact me.
热心网友
时间：2023-11-01 18:09
altitude 是attitude
if you had took应该用taken
a brilliant director of play应该用stage play或者drama
“ I have met with greatest personalities and ideals” greatest前面少冠词the
“ know more about him”最后一句从上下文看，性别代词用错了。
这些都是可以用英语纠错软件“易改”直接看出来的，建议修改稿还是去下个软件来过一下，免费的。
润色的话，易改自动生成的润色建议是：
第一段excellent换成exceptional
great attitude改成remarkble attitude
I really appreciate her 改成 I truly
这些个建议，我看了看主要都是避免你文中出现过的重复的一些老套词汇，还是有些道理的。
she got a bit lower grade 这句写的不好看，我建议写 her GPA seems to be...这样后面的转换比较自然。
我记得“易改”里面还有留学推荐信的模板和大量常用句型，可以参考下。追问真的都很好~我想每个都给分啊~
热心网友
时间：2023-11-01 18:09
In the capacity of vice dean of Foreign
Language Institute of Northeast Dianli University (NEDU), I am writing with
pleasure to recommend Miss Hang Su， an excellent student， to your esteemed
university.
Miss Hang Su, one of the diligent student
in my Reading Class, has deeply impressed me with her self-motivated altitude. Although
she got a bit lower grade, if you took the degree of the difficulty of the test papers
and my strict grading into account, you would understand why she is still among
the top 5% of my course. Besides her outstanding academic performance, she is
also a brilliant director of the stage play. When her play named “Our stories” was officially
released in our university auditorium, I felt honored to be invited as a
special guest. The gorgeous background and the exciting plot with twists and turns
deeply attracted me and the play was a big success. I was amazed
that Hang Su had such great talent. I really appreciate her conscientious
and dependable altitude toward her study and her work. All in all, Miss Hang Su is
one of the best girls I have ever met , who has sharp personalities and great ideals.
Judging from Miss Hang Su’s
character, her team spirit, enthusiasm and capability, I am firmly convinced that
Miss Hang Su will definitely become a successful graate. Your favorable consideration of her admission will be highly appreciated.
If you want to know more about her, please don't hesitate
to contact with me.追问真的很好~谢谢您~
