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发布时间：2022-05-11 09:52
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热心网友
时间：2023-10-10 17:55
我在美国工作近20年，自己写过求职信，也招过不少人、处理过无数的求职信。近来在网上看国内很多商业英语课程的视频、帖子中讲到的“求职信的写法”， 总觉得不得要领。所以把我所观察到的一些问题以及解决办法，与大家分享一下。
仔细阅读本文之前，请先用5秒钟，把下面这封求职信的原文很快地、粗略地扫一眼（不要仔细阅读），看你得出什么印象？然后再把该信仔细读一遍，看信下面的点评。
（这是一封比较典型的中国人写的求职信。与原作者的隐私可能相关的内容被用字母代替了）
To whom it may concern:
I am applying for the position of Immunology Technician, which was advertised on the website of ABCD.com. The position seems to fit very well with my ecation, experience, and career interests.
I have a (Country) "Diplom" degree in Molecular Biotechnology from xxx University, (Country). The courses that I took included Molecular Medicine and Bioanalysis. During my Diplom's thesis research I have acquired good experience in Elisa test.
I possess good English skills: I had passed College English Test (band 6), when I studied in China. I have continued to study on my own and maintained my English skills at a high level. I can quickly retrieve and read professional literature and thereafter wrote my Diplom thesis in English.
I have worked in the xxx Procts Quality Supervision and Inspection Institute for about X years, engaged in food laboratory testing and analysis. During this time I have experienced the Laboratory Accreditation.
Please pay special attention to my good (Country) language skills and many years of life experience in (Country). As a company with (Country) background, you may prefer these skills and experience.
I love laboratory research and development work and am confident of the development of the ICL (Independent Clinical Laboratory) in China. Your company aims to become China's largest Medical testing company. I wish I had the opportunity to help your company achieve this goal.
I should be glad to have a personal interview and am looking forward to receiving your answer.
Sincerely yours,
Xxx
点评：
首先，负责招聘的人一般都很忙，求职信必须在他用3、5秒钟粗略扫一眼的时候，就给他一个不错的印象，他才有可能仔细读信。如今用人单位都强调要找 team player，即具有团队精神的人。但你粗略扫一眼这封信就会发现： 总共7段话中，6段都是以“我” I 开头的。 尽管求职信的目的是推销自己，但不能给人以“此人很自我、自大”的感觉 (This guy is so full of himself!)。所以要尽可能少用“I”，尤其是在段落开头。这话听起来可能有点儿极端，但是请别忘了：我们说的是招聘经理面对一大堆信件，在3、5秒钟内匆匆作出的“是仔细阅读此信还是把它扔掉”的决定，而不是花30、50分钟仔细考虑后作出的理性决定。
其次，推销自己的关键，并不在于大谈自己的教育背景、专长、本领、经历，而在于说明自己的专长等等如何能够在这个职位上发挥什么重要作用。一句话，“我”能为“你”这个老板作出什么重要贡献、带来什么实际效益。求职者，是“卖方”；老板，是“买方”。这个道理说来再浅显不过，但是绝大多数人写求职信时偏偏就忘了这一点，所以你常可看到有人写出 “this position fits me very well”这种话来！ 正确的说法应该是类似这样的话： "...my ecation, advanced training, career interest, and above all, strong hands-on experience will be a tremendous asset in this position”。 整封信的重点，永远必须都放在招聘经理和这个职位上，强调“我”的经历、专长如何适合“你”这个经理和这个职位、如何能发挥重要作用，而且整封信的调子显得态度非常积极向上。
三、紧扣主题，用词力求简洁。公司的人一般都很忙，没功夫象衙门里的人那样搞“空对空”、“务虚”的东西。能用3个词说清楚的事情，不要用4、5个词。Keep it short and sweet – 简短、中听。
四、信中专门提到Molecular Medicine 和 Bioanalysis，那估计这2门课对这个工作比较重要。如果你这两门课学得不错的话，理当把自己的优秀成绩（或者有意义的实验报告等）专门提一下，以示能胜任这个工作。
五、招聘方的经理看来是洋人，否则不必用英文写此信。洋人未必对中国的英语考级制度太熟悉，在6级证书上着太多笔墨，未必合适。更何况如今中国考下了6级英语的人遍地都是，你有6级又如何？所以应该拉开自己与6级证书的距离，以显示自己英语实际应用水平之优秀、远在6级之上。此外，对这份工作而言，语言只是工具，不是技术专长。如果自己的英语应用能力确实如原信中提到的那样扎实，那还不如自告奋勇，邀请对方在网上或电话上先聊几句，让对方知道自己的英语实力。而且，一旦对方真的打电话来，那就已经表明他们很有兴趣了，你与他们直接通话，也更便于推销自己。
六、信的抬头，最好不要说“致启者”，显得非常疏远、冷漠。能找到招聘经理的姓名最好。实在不行，那就用 Dear Sir/Madam，也比 To whom it may concern 强。
七、关于lab accreditation 那段话，与其说 I experienced the lab accreditation process, 不如说I helped in the lab accreditation process / I was in charge of documentation or database…. / I played a key / leading part in the lab's accreditation process。如果在 accreditation 过程中具体做了什么有意义的工作，就必须提一下。关键在于处处表现出：“我的态度非常积极向上，无论到哪里，我对工作都全力以赴，都积极作贡献！”而不仅仅是“哦，对，那个 XXX的时候我也在。” Help 是一个非常灵活的词，既可用来适当地“吹嘘”自己，又留有余地、不显得过份。属于“进可攻，退可守”型的。如果在 accreditation 的过程中你就是一个小小当差的，那说 I helped ……. 也不过分，我哪怕帮着打了几个电话，也是 help 了！ 如果当时确实是独挡一面，对整个过程有比较重要的贡献，那就当仁不让，省去 help，而说 I played a key / leading part in ……
八、拿出一些自信心来！ 不要说 I wish。。。 wish = 不太可能实现的愿望，“要是。。。就好了”，比白日梦略强些，但强得有限。 Seem to，appear to 这类词，在求职信中谈到自己的条件为什么符合对方要求的时候，也要避免，否则显得缺乏自信。如果连你都对自己都没有十分的信心，用人单位又凭什么就该对你有信心？
最后，也是最基本的一条：尽最大可能确保语法、拼写的准确，以给人留下一个专业人士/ professional 的印象。追问那能不能麻烦你帮我修改并翻译一下啊 我看你解释的很清楚 非常感谢
追答你按照我建议的要点仔细改写一下就行了。好的文字都不是“写”出来的，而是改出来的。仔细改完一遍后，放到一旁，明天、后天再拿出来看看，推敲修改一番，谁都能把英语的作文、书信写得很像样。
热心网友
时间：2023-10-10 17:56
Hello!!!!! First of all, to your hard work with deeply respect!!!!! At the same time really thank you in your busy schele to read the application materials vertical. Today, I'm from college recruitment information column that your company hiring the driller, because is eager to join your company's oil fields in the technical services team, so to apply the posts.
University, in the strict teacher ecational and indivial effort, I have a solid basis of professional knowledge, excellent academic performance, won consecutive national scholarship and excellent students honor. According to the cooperation in running schools' specialty features, I study English specialty knowledge, have good English listening, speaking, reading, writing and translation. And the smooth through the national college students' English four levels of tests. Do my best to meet the company in the face the international market development of new employees in requirements. At the same time, I use after school to study computer software for office knowledge, can be engaged in the Word, Excel operation.
I also actively take part in all kinds of social activities, to seize every opportunity to exercise. Through professional training and skills to participate in competition, I deepened to the theoretical knowledge understanding, also mastered the related drilling equipment operation. I as oil workers from father learned a lot, not only should have long enred hard environment of perseverance, and treat work to bold carefully, seeking truth from facts, careless, abide by the management system. The experience of working in summer and winter vacations have further experience. Successively served as assistant and learning committee member, the teacher in charge from which I feel the importance of responsibility and to strengthen the communication can effectively achieve the organization and management ability, so as to serve the students. In addition, I also often exercise body, have a healthy body.
I believe I have the ability and perseverance competent for your company's position. If I am lucky enough to add to your company's team, I will aid this big stage, the full cast my talent and ability for the company to contribute my strength. Please believe me, believe that your choice.
I wish your esteemed company prosperity! I wish you good health, success in work! Eagerly waiting for your reply!!!! Thank you!
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salute
热心网友
时间：2023-10-10 17:56
Hello! First, to extend your deep respect for hard work! At the same time a sincere thank you for taking the time to read my job down material. Today, I learned that college recruiting information bar your recruitment drilling work, as eager to join your company's technical services team in the field, so to come to candidates.
College, lessons in the teacher's strict and personal effort, I have a solid foundation of professional knowledge, and achieved excellent academic performance, continuous access to national scholarships and other honors outstanding students. According to characteristics of cooperative ecation, professional settings, I seriously study the professional knowledge of English, with good English listening, speaking, reading, writing and translation capabilities. And passed the National College English Test. Do my utmost to meet the company's development in the international market demands for new employees. At the same time, in my spare time to learn the knowledge of computer office software, able to engage in Word, Excel aspects of the operation.
I also actively participate in various social activities, seize every opportunity to exercise their own. Professional training and skills through participation in competitions, I deepened the understanding of theoretical knowledge, but also to master the operation of the related drilling equipment. I as the father of oil workers learn a lot, not only have to enre the harsh environment of long-term persistence, and careful treatment of the work to be bold, realistic and holistic, compliance management system. This summer vacation experience has been further work experience. Has served as a member of the class teacher and learning assistants, from which I feel the responsibility and the importance of enhancing communication in order to effectively achieve organizational and management capacity, and thus serve the students. In addition, I also often exercise, with a healthy body.
I believe they have the ability and determination of the competent office of your work. If I had the honor to join your team, I will help the company this big stage, fully display my talent and my ability to contribute to the strength of the company. Please believe me, believe your choice.
Zhu Guigong Division flourishing! I wish you good health and smooth work! Eagerly look forward to hearing from you, thank you!
Sincerely,
Salute
热心网友
时间：2023-10-10 17:57
Hello! First of all, to your hard work to express deep respect! At the same time, thank you in his busy schele to read my job hanging material. Today, I from college recruitment information bar was informed that your company's recruitment of drilling engineering, because is eager to join your company oilfield technical services team, so to apply.
During the period of University, teachers and strict personal effort, I have a solid foundation of professional knowledge, and achieved excellent academic performance, continuous access to national scholarships and outstanding student award. According to the cooperation ecation of professional setting characteristics, I seriously study and professional knowledge of English, have good English listening, speaking, reading, writing, translation ability. And successfully passed the National College English test band four. Try my best to meet the company in the international market development of new employee requirements. At the same time, I used the spare time to learn computer office software knowledge, can be engaged in Word, Excel operation.
I also actively participate in various social activities, to seize every opportunity to exercise their own. By participating in the professional training and skills contest, I deepened the understanding of theoretical knowledge, but also master the associated drilling equipment operation. As the oil workers from my father learned a lot, not only have to enre the tough environment perseverance, work should be treated carefully and bold, seek truth from facts, the overall situation, abide by the management system. In the winter and summer vacations working experience with further experience. He served as the assistant and a member of the study, from which I feel the importance of responsibility and strengthen the communication can be effectively achieved the organization and management capacity, so as to serve the students. In addition, I also regular exercise, good health.
I believe I have the ability and the will for your company the job. If I have the honor to join your team, I will use this big stage, fully display my talent and ability to contribute my strength. Please believe me, believe your choice.
I wish the cause of your company be on the upgrade! I wish you good health, work smoothly! Eagerly look forward to hearing from you, thank you!
Sincerely yours
Salute
